Monday, November 06, 2006

Apple Cinnamon Oatmeal and The ABmagician

If any of you remember my character from the story I posted over at the SSG, here he is again. He's older now. He's 20. Thanks for taking the time to read it.


Apple Cinnamon Oatmeal and The ABmagician

Spickles Barkman’s alarm went off at 8:32 a.m. He pressed the snooze button. Three times. Spickles would sleep until he was fifty-five if he could. Then he'd retire. He didn’t have anything important to do today, so he could snooze the alarm as much as he wanted. Last night he went to bed just before the sun came up. There wasn’t a star left in the sky. At the time, he thought waking up early might make his day more productive than usual. With a pillow over his face after the third snooze, he wondered what time he’d have to wake up if he wanted to save the world. He wondered what time he’d have to go to bed.

Spickles showered quickly and dressed slowly. He started to plan his day while he was getting ready. He didn’t think in the shower because he didn’t want to forget if he had already shampooed his hair. The lawn needed a mowing, but that might wake the neighbors. He could go fill out some job applications, but he didn’t have any good references. He checked his wallet – two twenty-dollar bills, a five, three George Washingtons, and the fifty-dollar bill he tucked under the picture of his sister and pretended not to know about. He decided to go out to breakfast - breakfast always tasted better before noon.

He had three choices, The Hazelnut CafĂ©, Fitzgerald’s, or IHOP. He wasn’t in the mood for fancy cappuccinos, prissy employees, or coffee that claimed to be rich, dark, and earthly. That eliminated IHOP. Spickles decided to treat himself and chose Fitzgerald’s. Fitzgerald’s began as a small diner in 1951 before Cornelius Fitzgerald took over in 1977 and transformed the place into a full service restaurant.

Spickles wore a blue shirt to match his blue jeans. He wanted to wear the sharp new red shirt he bought recently, but didn’t have any red jeans to compliment it. He grabbed the keys to his car. Spickles referred to it as the poor man’s batmobile - a jet-black four-wheeler, equipped with power windshield wipers, a little gas door that you could open from the inside of the car, a regular brake, and an emergency brake. His parents bought it for him when he turned sixteen under two conditions. One, he paid for all the gas, and two, he would be his sister’s chauffeur when necessary. To get a car at sixteen he would have agreed to mow the lawn with scissors. Twice a week.

There were only a few cars in the spacious Fitzgerald’s parking lot. Spickles backed the batmobile into a spot in the row furthest from the door. The hostess who greeted him was in her forties, but she tried to look thirty. She had long unnatural blonde hair, fixed in a fancy style. Spickles knew a French braid, but this wasn’t a French braid. Italian curl, maybe. Her makeup covered the wrinkles forming on her forehead, and her yellowish lipstick highlighted the parts of her lips that weren’t her own. Her black vest stretched tightly around her upper body and her high heels and short skirt accentuated her toned thighs and firm calves. She looked good for a forty year old, but just all right for a thirty year old.

“Will anyone else be joining you this morning, sir?” she asked Spickles.

“Not unless you’d like to, ma’am,” Spickles replied. Spickles used this line on hostesses all the time.

“I appreciate the offer, but I just got off break, and we’re getting pretty busy,” she said. “Follow me and I’ll seat you.” She walked with a menu in her hand toward the back of the restaurant and stopped at a booth near the restrooms.

“Thanks.” Spickles took a seat. “If you get un-busy and would like to join me, you know where to find me.”

She smiled and walked away.

Spickles looked at the menu; it was nothing like the dollar menu from fast food restaurants. The only thing on the Fitzgerald’s menu under a dollar was a side of grape or strawberry jelly. Blackberry jelly was $1.09. If Spickles listed the greatest inventions of all time, paper would top his list, but a close second would be the dollar menu. The game of baseball, the previous channel button, and the microchip would round out his top five. An honorable mention would go to the slinky or yo-yo, he couldn’t decide. The tables near Spickles were barren except for the empty coffee cups and two vases of flowers that rested on each. Underneath was an embroidered tablecloth with the word Fitzgerald's along the edges. The hostess stood near the front door and looked out at the empty parking lot. The waitress who would be serving Spickles this morning approached his table.

“Good morning, sunshine. Are you ready to order?”

“I’ll have some apple cinnamon oatmeal, an order of hash browns, and an orange juice,” Spickles said.

“I’m sorry sir, but we only have plain oatmeal.”

“Bummer,” Spickles said. “Well, do you have any cinnamon rolls?”

“We sure do.”

“Any danishes?”

“We have peach, apple, cherry, blueberry, and apricot.”

“Well, Dorothy,” Spickles said, taking a sip of his water. “How about you ask one of your chefs if he or she wouldn’t mind taking some of the cinnamon used to make the cinnamon rolls, and sprinkling it on some plain oatmeal. Then ask that same chef if he could take some of the apples used to make the apple danishes and add that to the aforementioned oatmeal. If it’s not too much trouble.”

“I’ll see what I can do,” Dorothy replied.

At $5.99 for a bowl of oatmeal, Spickles thought, seeing what she could do was a good idea. Normally, Spickles wouldn’t order apple cinnamon oatmeal from such a fancy restaurant, but last night he had a sausage, bacon, and ham omelet for dinner and Spickles wasn’t the kind of guy to eat eggs for two meals in a row. Spickles was glad he was alone. He couldn’t hold a decent conversation with anyone else when he was always looking out the corner of his eyes at the food trays that came from the kitchen. Alone, he could keep an eye on his food and still reflect on his thoughts. He thought about Life. His family played it all the time, but he never has. He didn’t know what he would do if he lost. He decided if he ever did play, he wouldn’t buy fire insurance. Whenever he watched his family play, it seemed that the winner never had fire insurance. Dorothy came by and gave him an orange juice and a bowl of steaming oatmeal with cinnamon and apple bits sprinkled on top.

“Courtesy of Chef Stanley,” she said.

“Lovely. Just lovely.”

“Let me know if there’s anything else you need.”

She walked away, and while he was sipping his orange juice through a straw, waiting for his oatmeal to cool, he heard an argument from another table.

“Well, the total here is $71.43, cut that four ways, add tip, we’re looking at about twenty bucks a man.”

Spickles wondered how he came to that conclusion. A nine-dollar tip out of a $71 meal was barely over ten percent. Did the waitress lick all the food before serving it, and then while pouring the coffee, miss the cup completely and spill on the men? Or were they cheapskates? Spickles settled on the latter and dropped an ice cube into his oatmeal.

“Hey Harold, all I had was the Early Bird Special and a glass of milk. I didn’t order that imported coffee you guys were drinking. I shouldn’t owe more than 15 bucks, and that’s being generous.” Spickles looked at his menu, dark European rosewood coffee: $4.99, Costa Rican tres rios full bean hazelnut blend: $5.99, and the big papa, Colombian superior thrice-grinded vanilla-espresso: $7.99.

“Well, Ralph, we go out to eat together all the time. We usually just do it this way. It’s easier than getting technical. It all evens out in the end, doesn’t it, guys?” The other two men didn’t answer.
Spickles didn’t care who paid what. He just wanted his oatmeal to stop steaming. He dropped two more ice cubes in, and watched Dorothy take the order of a family a few tables away. eH

“I’ll have the three egg special,” the father said.

“Scrambled, poached, over-easy, over-hard, sunny side up, or basted?”

“Poached, please.”

“Bacon, Canadian bacon, ham, sausage patties, sausage links, or fresh fruit.”

“I’ll try the links.”

“White, wheat, rye, bagel, English muffin, or pumpernickel.”

“Wheat.” Dorothy continued to recite the menu for the rest of the family. The mother didn’t know what sides she could choose from, the girl didn’t know what cheeses came in the omelet, and the little boy wanted to know all the juices. Spickles figured she’d been working here since she was nine years old. When she was done at that table, Spickles raised a finger.

“Whada’ya need, sunshine?” She was in her fifties. Her star shaped nametag was fading.

“Do you think I could get another orange juice, and a couple pieces of double toasted rye bread, no butter?”

“Sure thing, darling.”

Another waitress walked past the men’s table, “I can take that whenever you’re ready.” Their waitress was only a few years older than Spickles. Her long blond hair hung in a ponytail, and her black rimmed glasses matched nicely with her black waitress vest.

“We’ll be ready in a moment, my friend the human calculator is having some trouble right now,” Ralph said.

Spickles could tell Ralph was upset now. Spickles always prided himself on knowing when people stopped joking about the restaurant bill and started getting serious.

“I’d rather be the human calculator than the human divorce. What are you up to now, about your fifth wife?” Howard said. The few people who were in the restaurant fell silent. He stood up and walked toward Howard slowly. Another member of the group, a bald man with glasses, put his hand out to stop him.

“Relax, Clarence, I’m just going to show him how to divide.” Spickles dropped another ice cube from his orange juice into the oatmeal bowl. Dorothy brought him his toast.

“Here you go, dear. I brought you a few packets of butter, too. In case you change your mind.”

“Thanks, Dorth.”

Spickles looked back at the men. Ralph was clenching Howard’s shirt collar in his hands.

“Wait.” Clarence yelled. “I almost forgot. I have a coupon, good for fifty percent off.” Ralph loosened his grip and looked at him.

“Fifty?”

“Yeah, fifty. My wife gave it to me just before I left.”

“That will work”

“Yeah it sure will,” Howard said. “Well, fifty percent off $71.43 is about $36, plus tip, eleven bucks each, gentlemen. How about you speak up a little sooner next time, Clarence.”

Thanks to the collection of ice cubes that had now vanished from his bowl while he watched the spectacle, Spickles’ oatmeal was lukewarm and soggy. He slurped the few remaining drops of orange juice from the bottom of his first cup, left a twenty-dollar bill on his table, and walked out. He also left a five-dollar bill on the cheapskate’s table.


Spickles drove home, down twenty-five dollars, and still hungry. It was only 10:30 when he got back to his house, so he decided to go back to sleep. He took off his shoes without untying them, and set his alarm for 1:27. He sprawled out on the couch and turned on the TV. If he tried to sleep in silence, he’d always end up thinking about stuff. Just last night, as he was about to drift off to dreamland, Spickles began trying to name the First Ladies in order. He knew Martha Washington, and then fifteen minutes later he managed to recall Abigail Adams, followed by Mrs. Jefferson. He didn’t count Mrs. Jefferson, though, because he didn’t think her real first name was Mrs. He thought it might have been Linda, but he couldn’t guarantee that.

Spickles flipped through the channels and settled on The Price is Right. That Bob Barker is about 97, going on 43. Spickles was just in time to see the first item up for bid - a beautiful chandelier. Some college guy, from some unknown community college out in California, bid the closest without going over. Now he had a chance to win a lovely sofa and a fine dinette set, all he had to do was decide whether the prices listed for each were correct, or if they were reversed. He lost.

The next item up for bid was a keyboard. The housewife who wore a shirt that said, “I don’t stay home to watch my kids, I stay home to watch BOB!” started the bidding at $350. Then the grandma, who seemed too out of date with popular culture to bid correctly on anything that used electricity, bid $375. It was the worst bid in the history of The Price is Right, but Spickles forgave her. She was old. The Navy officer bid $500. Now Spickles knew the obvious move for the last person was to bid $501. Sportsmanship is not a part of The Price is Right The guy bid $1000. Spickles looked again to see if the keyboard came with a complimentary 500-dollar bill. Barker announced the price at $550.

“$1000,” Spickles said. “At least the lady was old.”

Spickles’ eyelids grew heavy; he adjusted the pillow beneath him and pulled the blanket closer to his head. He turned away from the TV, still listening as the Navy Officer tried to win a new car.

His alarm went off at 1:27. He snoozed it until 1:47. When he woke up he still had nothing to do. He didn’t have to go to work because he didn’t have a job. He didn’t have a job because his parents paid for his college education. He gave Roy a call. Roy’s mom answered.

“Hello,” she said.

“Hello this is Spickles, is Roy there?”

“Sure, one second, Spickles.”

“Hello,” Roy said.

“What’s up?”

“Nothing.”

“Wanna do something?”

“Like what?”

“I dunno”

“Wanna go mini-golfing?” Spickles suggested this even though they went the last two days.

“How much is it today?”

“Free, Tipselle is working.”

“All right.”

“I’ll pick you up in twenty.”

“Later.”

As soon as he hung up the phone Spickles knew the next twenty minutes of his life would be a complete waste. He had time to put away the clothes that he washed yesterday, or to catch up on the book he was reading, but instead he just reflected on the idea that he had time to do this stuff.

The poor man’s batmobile pulled into Roy’s driveway eighteen minutes later. Roy came out wearing khaki shorts and a navy blue polo. His Chicago White Sox hat covered his short brown hair, and was down far enough to cast a shadow over his nose. Spickles unlocked the passenger side door and they left.

The drive to Jungle Greens was normal. Spickles rolled a stop sign and they saw the ice cream man.

She was sitting on a barstool inside the little shack when they got there. Today she wore an old t-shirt, the sleeves rolled up to the shoulders, and her brother’s basketball shorts. Beneath her blond hair, tied sloppily into a ponytail, her forehead leaked droplets of sweat through her tan skin. She was munching on nachos, and left a dab of cheese on her upper lip. There was an empty Pepsi can on the counter and a half filled one next to it. Spickles thought she looked gorgeous.

“Hey guys,” she said.

“Hey.”

“Hey.”

“How’s work been going?” Spickles asked.

“Pretty slow.”

“Well, we’re gonna get a round in before the rush comes, if that’s alright. We’ll keep you company after.”

“Go for it,” Tipselle said and went back to her nachos.

There was no rush coming. There had only been four rushes in the history of Jungle Greens. Two came on Father’s Day when fathers golfed free.

Spickles set his ball down on the black mat at the first hole.

“How much we playing for?” he asked Roy.

“Nothing, unless I get a handicap.”

“I’ll add 2 strokes to my score at the end.”

“Ten,” Roy said with hesitation.

“Make it twelve,” Spickles said with a sparkle in his eye. “Five bucks.”

The first hole was a straight putt with a small hill halfway down the green. Spickles went first. His green ball rested on the middle hole of the black mat as he knelt behind it, visualizing his shot.

“Hey, Tiger Woods, how bout you putt already,” Roy said.

Spickles addressed the ball, took two practice strokes, and then putted. It traveled down the green carpet as if it were on a track headed straight for the hole. It climbed over the hill with perfect speed and trickled all the way down to the bottom of the cup.

“Tiger misses that putt left,” Spickles said.

Roy put his ball down on the mat. He didn’t take any practice strokes. The ball had a good line towards the hole, but he hit it too firm, and it sped past the hole. He made it on the next shot.

“Hey, you’re still ahead by 11,” Spickles said as he grabbed Roy’s ball from the cup and tossed it to him.

The second hole at Jungle Greens is a short par three. The four legs of a large, but not quite life sized, plastic giraffe block the path to the hole. Meredith, named by Tipselle, stood with her legs close together, the best path to the hole was along side of the short concrete walls that lined the green. Again, Spickles set his ball down and squatted behind it.

“Dude, you’ve played this course more times than Billy Joel has played a piano. You know the exact spot where you should hit the ball, stop acting like this is the U.S. Open,” Roy said.

Ping. Meredith watched it roll past her left foot, brush up against the wall, roll past her left hind leg and trickle into the hole.

“I would have went with Elton John on the piano analogy,” Spickles said.

Roy made a two again. He was golfing well, but the sparkle in Spickles’ eye wouldn’t go away.

“I’ll tell you what,” Spickles said. “Once I make up these twelve strokes, which will be by about the ninth hole, I’ll start putting lefty.”

“Whatever.”

At the end of eighteen holes, Spickles had shot a thirty to Roy’s forty-four.

“Looks like I owe you five. Roy said as they walked back to the shack. “That was the luckiest round of golf I’ve ever witnessed. You better try to make something happen with Tipselle today before your luck runs out.”

“Who won?” she asked when they brought their clubs back.

“Is that a serious question?” Spickles said, laughing.

“Shut up.” Roy said.

“Hey, Tipselle, how about a Gatorade?” Tipselle set down her bag of peanut M&M’s and grabbed Spickles a Gatorade.

“You want one, Roy?”

“No thanks.”

“So what are you doing tonight, Tipselle?” Spickles asked in between sips.

“I don’t know. You should call me and we can hang out.” She smiled at him.

Roy looked at his phone. It was 3:15.

“Hey, we gotta get going. I got work at four,” he told Spickles. Spickles thanked Tipselle for the Gatorade and told her he’d talk to her later. He and Roy walked back to the car.

“There’s my move. Same move I always make. Let’s see if she answers this time,” Spickles said. Roy laughed.


Spickles was back home, now only down twenty dollars, but still hungry. He put a frozen pizza in the oven. He thought about what he could do while it cooked. He still had that laundry to put away, he needed to write thank you letters to his relatives that sent him birthday money, and his sister asked him to burn a CD for her. He settled on playing minesweeper on his computer. By the time the pizza was done, he had lost 46 games in a row. He ate the whole pizza, flossed, and took a nap.

He woke up at 6:54. He took a shower, and since he had no clean clothes to choose from, ended up putting away his laundry. At 8:45, he called Tipselle. Spickles knew how much she meant to him because he didn’t wait until after 9:00 for his free minutes to kick in. She didn’t answer. He hated caller ID. He went downstairs, told his mom he didn’t have plans yet, told his sister he’d have the CD soon, and then walked back upstairs into his room. He considered his options – wait for Tipselle to call back, wait for Roy to get off work so they could drive around together, wait for nothing in particular, or take the batmobile out for a ride by himself. He chose the latter. He told his parents he’d be back later.

For Spickles, it was never a question of destination. He wasn’t going anywhere. He started in his driveway, drove on the same streets over and over in no order and ended up in his driveway. If a friend called him and asked what he was doing, he’d say he was driving around. If they asked where he was going, he’d say nowhere. Tonight, as it often did, nowhere ended up at the park. He swayed back and forth on a swing and watched the stars appear in the sky. Each one that appeared shone brighter than the last. Stars fascinated him. He wanted to be one. He learned that they live for about thirteen billion years, emitting heat and light, and then when they run out of hydrogen or helium, their core contracts and the outer layers expand, cool, and become less bright. They eventually collapse and explode. That’s what he wanted to do. He marveled at how much we do with stars, we watch them, we name them, we study them, we buy them, we let them predict the future, and we make up nursery rhymes about them. All the while, they’re light years away, gradually dying, with no choice but to give away everything they were born with. They are constantly dying. He swung faster now, pondering what life would be like as a star. It was 11 p.m. He worked the swing into a feverish rhythm, leaned back and gazed up; his body was horizontal. He watched the stars illuminate the darkness while they died.

When he left the park he drove past Tipselle’s house. Her car wasn’t there. For the rest of the night he drove three miles under the speed limit and never went through a yellow light.

Spickles walked back into his house at 2:15 a.m. and put on the TV. Thirty-four out of the sixty-five channels on his TV had infomercials on. In a few weeks, he could own a 50-piece knife set. One knife could slice tomatoes into floss. He could also have an automatic juicer that doubles as an iron, the ABmagician that would turn his stomach into an impenetrable steel wall in 6 weeks or less, or a small little robot that could wash, soap, vacuum, dust, scrub, and make his house sparkle. Spickles decided to call one of the stations.

“Hello, Helpful Home Products line, this is Judy, how may I help you?”

“Yes I’m calling about the ABmagician.”

“Would you like to place an order?”

“Well it’s 4 easy payments of $19.99, correct?”

“Yes sir, that’s by credit card only.”

“I was wondering if I could maybe condense that into one real hard payment of, say, seventy dollars?”

After she hung up Spickles went on his computer. He wanted to talk to somebody, but no one was online. He burnt the CD for his sister and left it on the kitchen table. After some more minesweeper and a 4 a.m. episode of Full House, Spickles flossed and went to bed in his jeans on the couch in the basement. He hated going to sleep, but he loved sleeping.

2 comments:

P.B. said...

I already mentioned to you that this sort of threw me off at first because I was thinking that Spickles was still a kid, discovering that he’s a young man in this story helped a little but I still had quite a few questions about this. First, I think it seems obvious that this installment is intended to be part of a novel rather than a short story, but still I wondered if that is in fact true. After reading the story, I was left with the impression that it must be part of a larger story because this seemed to me to have no truly proper beginning nor ending. The bit about the alarm clock and the fact that he wants to sleep his life away but he never wants to go to bed when he’s awake was amusing and certainly true for a lot of young people his age, but still, it didn’t seem like a beginning. It might be all right for the beginning of a short story if we had more of a sense where the story is going in the beginning. I don’t want to know the whole plot right away of course but I like to have a sense that I’m the journey with you for a reason. I didn’t get that from your beginning.

Next, I had questions about his conduct with the hostess and the waitress. Why flirt with these women? Are you trying to tell us something about his character or lack of it? To me, it just wasn’t quite clear. On the one hand, maybe he has the philosophy that he wants to make the world a better place by doing what he can to make other feel better especially about themselves (i.e. flattering an older woman with the thought that she still looks good enough to attract a young man) or is he the kind of guy who will pretty much nail any woman just for the sex? It just wasn’t clear to me.

Then there’s the bit with the oatmeal. Was he flattering his waitress so she would go to the extra trouble for him? See what I mean? His motives are not at all clear, at least for me, and I think if this is a short story then they need to be. If it’s part of a novel, then of course we would presumably know a lot more about him and what makes him tick so you wouldn’t have to fill in so many blanks here.

When I was reading this through the first time, I was also thrown off by the title. I took it to be A B Magician, something like The Phantom Tollbooth or a Harry Potter kind of thing. This is one reason I was pulled up short when you started talking about him driving and such. Then I realized he was a young man, old enough to drive, and I learned he was even in college already, and that’s when I had a problem with the title. I was wondering what the heck an ab magician is. So I kept reading expecting to find out of course. Imagine my shock as I discovered it’s a reference to an infomercial product! I dunno, just didn’t seem like a proper ending to me. What did the scene at the end have to do with the rest? Are you telling me this kid has grown up to be a waster? (There’s the bit in the restaurant with the ice cubes and the oatmeal. I had a question about that too actually. Why would he keep dumping so many ice cubes into this breakfast that it became inedible if he was really hungry? I know the disagreement among the cheap men sitting next to him distracted him but is that enough motivation? Then he leaves the restaurant still hungry? Are you saying he’s the kind of guy who likes to get people to go out of his way for him and then just wastes their effort?). Okay, I think you get what I mean. I know this isn’t especially helpful really. That’s one reason I’ve taken so long to respond. I was trying to think of something helpful. I dunno, maybe if you could answer some of these questions in the next draft, maybe that would be a help.

Oh, one last thing, the most attractive thing about Spickles in the first story, at least to me, was what a clever little fellow he is, how he wants to use that intelligence to entertain even press his luck to pull of a silly prank on his battleaxe of a teacher and then have all his efforts come to nothing. I suspect you may have been wanting to do something similar to that here but I think all the questions in mind got in the way.

Wojo said...

Your point about having a sense that there's a reason for being on the journey with Spickles is exactly the issue I've been trying to figure out in this story. I do have a lot of seperate stories about Spickles, which I would like to bring together sometime, but in terms of this story, it's nothing more than "A day in the life." It's tough for it to stand on its own without some other element going on that makes the reader care.

In terms of his motivation behind some actions - well, sometimes there is none. For example, parking in a far away spot when there a bunch of close ones open. That's just Spickles. For some of his other actions, he just enjoys challenging social order and decorum. I'd say 98 percent of people would just have ordered something else when the waitress said they didn't have his oatmeal, but he sees things differntly.

Thanks very much for the comments, you may not think they were helpful, but trust me they were.